Writings and Editings

This is one of my favorite writings from NaNo. Not my favorite--that honor goes to one which I'm sure is good and has follow-ups. This one I'd like to be good and might find myself inspired to write more of the same style. I'm not sure.
This goes halfway to a stream-of-consciousness trend in my recent writing. I want to know if it's working, although this isn't my most extreme example of it (which is also my favorite piece from NaNo--the main character is trying to find a reason to live after having achieved his life-quest for vengeance). Anyway, this one has been slightly, spontaneously renamed, so let's see what you think about:

( On Pack Dynamics )